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Title: The(y) kiss
Pairing: Sherlock/John
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: ~900
Summary: They kiss. That's all.

A/N: This is my first fic, and English is not my native language, so forgive this thing... I just needed to write it. Thanks to Sophie, who has been the most brilliant, amazing, lovely beta I could have dreamt.
The awesome Creole has made this amazing (maybe amazing is not enough to cover it) fake book cover for my fic. I have no words, really... Thank you from the bottom of my melted heart.
This fic has been translated into Chinese here by the lovely sunny0421! How amazing is that? :'3






They kiss.


If this were a romance novel, there would be a fire, two glasses of wine and roses. If this were a Disney movie, there would be little birds, music, vivid colours, so vivid they burn, and a final moral. If this were porn, there would be tongues tracing fast, eager routes down a shaven chest, a sculpted abdomen, skin shining with a layer of sweat. If this were an old movie, here would be an intertitle that’d say “They kiss”, a tickling moustache, a bowler hat blown off by the wind, and a fade-out. If this were a 90s TV show, there would be a canned aaaawww from the audience, a close-up to their mouths, there would be make-up, and next-week preview. If this were a dream, if this were a dream, John’s lips would be of paper, a wet paper that’s melting in the kiss, and Sherlock’s mouth would be a mirror, a steamed up mirror, with a drawn heart as his lips, and licking the mirror is like licking a reflection, it’s like licking oneself -it’s like a cat lazily licking himself, like two cats sharing a kiss. Two cats made of paper kissing each other.


But this is not a dream. It’s not a romance novel, this is not happening on a set, this is not moving at 24 frames per second, there is no make-up, there is no wind. And yet, they kiss.


It’s easy. Their mouths have always been close (since the very beginning; since that Bart’s lab; since incaseyouwereneedingtwobedrooms; since the cab; since their first crime scene together; since that small table at Angelo’s, that small flirting at Angelo’s; since the drugs bust; since that window from which John saved Sherlock from himself; since they walked back home; since walking together was already like being at home). Even with the height difference, their mouths have been always very close, too close, close enough to make this easy. To make a kiss mean only being those few inches closer.


So they kiss. There is pressure - a pug nose pressing against an aristocratic cheek, and pale chin rubbing against stubble - but it’s the wet, warm, electrifying pressure of their mouths which eclipses everything else, in a more-than-pleasant overwhelming way. So overwhelming that John has closed his eyes, drifting in the feeling that is not a dream, that is just pleasure and uncertainty. Because this is unexplored territory, and as the kiss deepens, lasts, for a second of panic, John wonders if Sherlock will have his eyes closed too, and thinks (though he doesn’t dare to check it) that of course he won’t. Those aseptic, slightly intimidating pupils, will be looking at John’s closed eyes. Cataloguing. Observing.


I’d like to tell John that he’s wrong. That Sherlock's eyes are indeed shut. That he isn't methodically cataloguing every sensation the kiss brings, but that he is also reduced to feeling (perceiving? processing?... no, feeling, definitely feeling) what is beneath his lips, his skin, deeper, so much deeper, far away from the surface, feeling what is in his heart (brain? nerves? loins?... no, his heart, definitely his heart). But I can’t tell John this, because I am only the narrator. I exist here only to write that they kiss. That Sherlock and John are kissing in the kitchen.


Obviously their first kiss has to be in the kitchen, because it was a domestic space that Sherlock turned into a war zone. It was a war zone that John has turned into the place they kiss for first time. Was John, then, who decided to kiss Sherlock? Maybe it was him, because in Afghanistan (no, no, even before, much before, at the rugby field), John had got into the habit of moving forward just when everybody and everything had shouted at him to back off, withdraw. One. Step. Forward. Just a few inches closer. Throwing himself into danger. To unexplored territory. So maybe it was him, then, but not because of all the above. No, it was because Sherlock had been leaving (like a trail of bread crumbs), secret hints, signals towards that unexplored territory, hints that whispered (shouted) kiss me (KISS ME). Signals towards the kiss. A trail of breadcrumbs towards his mouth. In fact, just a few seconds before the kiss, just a few seconds after finishing his breakfast, Sherlock had two (distracting, tempting) breadcrumbs on the left corner of his mouth, which John licked away with his (distracting, tempting) tongue. Because John has always been good at following trails.


Obviously their first kiss has to be after breakfast. They kiss after breakfast and before sex. If this were a NC-17 fic, I would write about the amazing (maybe amazing is not enough to cover it) sex (maybe sex is not enough to cover it) they had after the kiss. About just how good John is at following a trail, down down down and into, just a few inches deeper ohjust-t-t-there, or about how good Sherlock is at tracing a map with his fingertips on the new territory that John’s body is, from the West to the East, from the North to the South (oh-the-South-I-will-conquer-you) and again towards the North, teasingly, playfully exploring, with the promise of return.


But this is not a NC-17 fic; nor a dream; nor a novel; nor a movie.


It’s a kiss. A long kiss. A kiss that lasts 895 words. A very long kiss, then. But (because) it’s not a kiss.


It’s the kiss. The kiss that’s going to change everything.






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On June 26th, 2011 11:36 pm (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
aksjdabkdsbadshbads I can't believe YOU are commenting my fic. omg. Especially when your fic, YOUR VOICE, has been so inspiring to me.
So thank you, really, I have now the most stupid, melted smile on my face.
<3
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On June 26th, 2011 11:22 pm (UTC), raggedyhipster commented:
woman I adore you and everything you stand for and everything about this and just shut up and let me hug you.

I feel like I should be making more useful comments here but really all that I could say I've already said when you did me the very great honour of letting me beta this.
You're wonderful Rosalia (:

"Maybe it was him, because in Afghanistan (no, no, even before, much before, at the rugby field), John had got into the habit of moving forward just when everybody and everything had shouted at him to back off"

still forever my favourite part.
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On June 26th, 2011 11:37 pm (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
I ADORE YOU, SOPHIE. This hadn't be possible without you :'}

(that's one of my favourites parts too)
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On June 26th, 2011 11:38 pm (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
Oh, that would be amazing! Thanks!
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On June 26th, 2011 11:40 pm (UTC), violetbruises commented:
THIS WAS SO LOVELY I DON'T EVEN KNOW WHERE TO BEGIN. ROSALIA YOU'RE AMAZING. FUCKING BRILLIANT. UGH. FEELINGS, I HAS THEM.

I WOULD QUOTE MY FAVOURITE BITS BUT I CAN'T PICK THEM. IT'S. ALL. SO. BEAUTIFUL.

MAYBE THIS BIT THOUGH:

Obviously their first kiss has to be in the kitchen, because it was a domestic space that Sherlock turned into a war zone. It was a war zone that John has turned into the place they kiss for first time.

OR THIS:

I’d like to tell John that he’s wrong. That Sherlock's eyes are indeed shut. That he isn't methodically cataloguing every sensation the kiss brings, but that he is also reduced to feeling (perceiving? processing?... no, feeling, definitely feeling) what is beneath his lips, his skin, deeper, so much deeper, far away from the surface, feeling what is in his heart (brain? nerves? loins?... no, his heart, definitely his heart).

OR THIS:

No, it was because Sherlock had been leaving (like a trail of bread crumbs), secret hints, signals towards that unexplored territory, hints that whispered (shouted) kiss me (KISS ME). Signals towards the kiss. A trail of breadcrumbs towards his mouth. In fact, just a few seconds before the kiss, just a few seconds after finishing his breakfast, Sherlock had two (distracting, tempting) breadcrumbs on the left corner of his mouth, which John licked away with his (distracting, tempting) tongue. Because John has always been good at following trails.

SEE I TOLD YOU EVERYTHING IS MY FAVOURITE. GOD.

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THIS. I REALLY NEEDED IT <33333

(oh and this is jess/sussexdowns)
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On June 27th, 2011 12:01 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
AWWWWWWWW JESS THANK YOU. AND YOU ARE EVEN QUOTING ME. OMG. MY HEART.

Also, I'm very happy to have given you some happy!John/Sherlock after all the angst you've read today.... I was suffering reading your liveblogging!!!! :'(

I ADORE YOU <3
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On June 26th, 2011 11:54 pm (UTC), faience commented:
Lovely!
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On June 27th, 2011 12:03 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
Thank you!! :'3
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On June 27th, 2011 12:09 am (UTC), claralamora commented:
Well done!
I like this, very well written -and you say English is not your native tongue?- and it's got a nice feeling, which is very important in a any text, I think. :)
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On June 27th, 2011 10:07 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
Re: Well done!
Oh, thank you!!! And yes, that "nice feeling" is very important to me, as a reader too! ^^
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On June 27th, 2011 12:21 am (UTC), destroyallmuzak commented:
Amazing. Just amazing. I'd been hoping to find some non-smutty fic that sums up the adorableness in their relationship. And plus, the narration is one of my favourite types, when the narrator is using a stream-of-consciousness style of speaking. It just adds another dimension to the emotions they are feeling. Great job!!!

(...and this is Kathleen aka martinmallows from Tumblr)
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On June 27th, 2011 10:09 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
Thanks Kathleen!!!What you said about the narrator is, word by word, what I meant to do in this fic, so your comment just made me feel ridiculously happy!! :D
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On June 27th, 2011 12:41 am (UTC), Zymyrax commented:
This was brilliant.
This is absolutely incredible. I can't believe it. It's the perfect balance of deepness and fluff, and the style is wonderful. Please please please write more fics - the Sherlock universe needs more of this.
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On June 27th, 2011 10:14 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
Re: This was brilliant.
omg... Can I just hug your comment until the end of time? Thank you, seriously, I don't think i deserve it, but i'm going to take it anyway... And with all this encouregement, yes, I think I'll write more... :)
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On June 27th, 2011 10:14 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
awww thank you!!! :')
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On June 27th, 2011 12:54 am (UTC), brevityis commented:
This is absolutely beautiful. Seriously. I love the ways its different from if it was a movie/NC-17 fic/dream, etc. And the description and the pretty and the oh my god I can't describe it all because it's beautiful.

It reminds me a little of “Since the invention of the kiss, there have only been five kisses that were rated the most passionate, the most pure. This one left them all behind.” line from The Princess Bride. Because the description really makes it feel like it is just that freaking awesome, it's a moment frozen in time and beautiful for that.

So hard to say everything I'm feeling here aside from I freaking love you and wish I could write as well in Spanish as you do in English. Then maybe I could send you a love-note of explanation and dedication. Wow. <3
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On June 27th, 2011 10:23 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
OH OH OH That "Princess Bride" line... That movie is one of my absolute favorites, so to me that's the best compliment I could imagine!!! And what you said here: "it's a moment frozen in time and beautiful for that"
...wow, that's really beautiful, it was what i meant to express (mmhhhhh i wish i had written those words!! :P)

THANK YOU <3 <3 <3 <3 <3
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On June 27th, 2011 01:08 am (UTC), mazarin221b commented:
Ah, that first fic. Exhilarating, isn't it? Very nice. I like the construction of it, and the idea that they're always so close but not quite there for a long time beforehand rings very true.

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On June 27th, 2011 10:35 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
OMG


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I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU'VE COMMENTED MY FIC. YOU ARE ONE OF MY FAVORITE AUTHORS IN THE SHERLOCK FANFIC WORLD. Seriously, when I did the Sherlock Fandom Voice Meme (http://anarmydoctor.tumblr.com/post/6621629389/the-sherlock-fandom-voice-meme-via) I was reading your Starry Nights Series (which are beautiful, touching and perfect, btw) and I read one excerpt from them to answer the 5th question ^^'

Thank you, really, and yes, it was a great feeling to write it, and I think i'll keep writing... it's a bit addictive!!
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On June 27th, 2011 02:12 am (UTC), slashfairy commented:
oh.my.goodness.

*happy happy*
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On June 27th, 2011 10:35 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
Thank you!!!! :D
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On June 27th, 2011 02:28 am (UTC), mediumofsound commented:
Rosalia. I really don't know how to start with this. I have no words. You've stolen them all. <3

The entire style of this is so perfect; it all flows so well and it has a really magical quality to it.

it’s like licking oneself -it’s like a cat lazily licking himself, like two cats sharing a kiss. Two cats made of paper kissing each other.

God, the way you tie things together is wonderful. This simile is probably my favorite, haha, it's such a nice mental picture.

Even with the height difference, their mouths have been always very close, too close, close enough to make this easy. To make a kiss mean only being those few inches closer.

My heart! Ah, it's all so fantastic, but these two sentences seem to stand out the most to me. The way you've written these two is so great. It's all so believable, the way you make them sound.

Maybe it was him, because in Afghanistan (no, no, even before, much before, at the rugby field), John had got into the habit of moving forward just when everybody and everything had shouted at him to back off, withdraw. One. Step. Forward. Just a few inches closer. Throwing himself into danger.

This is John to me. Exactly John. You've captured him absolutely.

Because John has always been good at following trails.

Yes. And then the ending. Oh.
I really wish I was able to tell you everything that I think of this. It's more than amazing, and more than wonderful, and WAY MORE than beautiful.
There aren't enough 'isimo's in the world to cover the 'very's that I need in order to say how much I love this.
I hope that that's enough, even though I know i'd never ever be able to tell you all of the things that I love about this. <3
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On June 27th, 2011 10:43 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
ALEX, OH ALEX.... LET ME LOVE YOU
Seriously, your comment just gave me all the feelings, it was so important to me that you'd like my fic... ajdsadbsajbdajbdsa

I'm so glad you liked the description of the dream, and John's characterization... I think It's obvious how much i love John... :P

TE QUIERO MUCHISIMO, AND ALL THE ISIMOS THE SPANISH GRAMMAR COULD HAVE CREATED IN ALL ITS HISTORY <3
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On June 27th, 2011 10:52 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
oh THANK YOU :'}
YOU ARE TOO SWEET!!!!
(and ajsdhbadsjahsdajkn I have a soft spot for the line you quoted... ^^ Thank you, again)

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On June 27th, 2011 05:47 am (UTC), kirakira_nanoda commented:
Oh so beautiful! I'm meant to be studying right now but who cares! This was wonderful :D

You need to write more, and your English is fine! Much better than my English first thing in the morning anyway :D

<3
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On June 27th, 2011 10:56 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
d'aawwwww THANK YOU! *muah*
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On June 27th, 2011 10:56 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
Thanks!!! <3
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On June 27th, 2011 07:18 am (UTC), meandthemadman commented:
Rosalia dear this was absolutely gorgeous! I just I can't, I love it!

Obviously their first kiss has to be in the kitchen, because it was a domestic space that Sherlock turned into a war zone. It was a war zone that John has turned into the place they kiss for first time.

Just that line, my gosh, and that whole paragraph actually can I just roll in that forever or?

I love you and I love this just as much! ♥
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On June 27th, 2011 10:59 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
OH JESS
OH
THANK YOU :')
I love you too, and the fact you liked my fic is making my heart sing and dance and keymash on my chest... *sigh*
<3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3
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On June 27th, 2011 09:10 am (UTC), kaalee commented:
This was really beautiful; I loved the style of it and the description. ♥
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On June 27th, 2011 10:59 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
oh thank you!!!!!!!! ^^
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On June 28th, 2011 11:50 am (UTC), psychedk commented:
That was so cute! I love kissing fics :D Thanks for writing this <3
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On June 29th, 2011 09:51 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
Oh, well... It was a PLEASURE! :'3
(thank you!!)
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On June 28th, 2011 07:01 pm (UTC), thistlefrost commented:
Ahhhh that was so good!
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On June 29th, 2011 09:51 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
Thanks! <3
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On June 28th, 2011 07:04 pm (UTC), zephyrrdragon commented:
This is beautiful, and the best part is that it doesn't feel like it needs to continue! I love the way you've written it in the third person there-but-not-there kind of way too! Also, if I didn't know English wasn't your first language you would be one of the last I would suspect! This is amazing!
(I'm here from tumblr too - zephyrdragon)
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On June 29th, 2011 09:56 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
ajhsdbajhdsbashdbajhbdsa thank you so much!!
And yes, I agree with this fic not needing to be continued... I wanted to write it like if it was a poem, an individual "unit of meaning" ^^ ...so I'm very glad it worked (at least to you and to me hahaha)

<3
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On June 29th, 2011 09:28 am (UTC), singr4fic commented:
MY MIND HAD JUST EXPLODE !
THIS IS THE PURELY EPIC KISS.
BEST I'VE EVER EVER READ. YOU WIN THE FANDOM.
YOU WIN EVERTHING.
GOD. I love John and Sherlock more after reading it!

I'd very very very very much like to translate this into Chinese. Out of LOVE.(Mine, and of course that of the two.)
Could you be kind enough to offer the permission?
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On June 29th, 2011 09:58 am (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
Re: MY MIND HAD JUST EXPLODE !
OMG


WOW


That's so flattering!!!!!!!!!!! *_*
Of course you have my permission (and you have my heart if you want it too)
THANK YOU. THIS TOTALLY MADE MY DAY.
:')
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On June 29th, 2011 04:08 pm (UTC), falling_voices commented:
This is the loveliest thing. This

If this were a dream, if this were a dream, John’s lips would be of paper, a wet paper that’s melting in the kiss, and Sherlock’s mouth would be a mirror, a steamed up mirror, with a drawn heart as his lips, and licking the mirror is like licking a reflection, it’s like licking oneself -it’s like a cat lazily licking himself, like two cats sharing a kiss. Two cats made of paper kissing each other.

and this

Obviously their first kiss has to be in the kitchen, because it was a domestic space that Sherlock turned into a war zone. It was a war zone that John has turned into the place they kiss for first time.

specifically, because there's something so intense about these two passages. So, so lovely.

i sort of want to podfic this now

i've never podficced anything before but this might be a start
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On June 29th, 2011 11:02 pm (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
OH A PODFIC????
THAT WOULD BE AWESOME. MORE THAN AWESOME.
(forgive the capslock but I AM SCREAMING)

Thank you, seriously, you are too kind! And I love those passages too!!! :)
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On June 30th, 2011 02:29 pm (UTC), lady_with_cats commented:
Maybe there will be words to fill the void the end of this fic has left in me. ;_;
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On June 30th, 2011 06:14 pm (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
Oh, I'm sorry ;___;
But actually it's a happy ending, don't you think? ^^
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On June 30th, 2011 10:58 pm (UTC), anafase commented:
Vaya fic más fantástico. Escribes genial, a estas alturas puedes decir que el inglés es tu lengua oficial también ^^ ¡Sin problemas! Madre mía, qué maravilla. Lo que me gustan estos dos juntos es increíble, pero es que has conseguido que lo vea perfectamente, toda la escena. Que sepas que para mí, desde ahora, este es su primer beso oficial :P

¡Gracias por compartir!
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On July 1st, 2011 11:03 pm (UTC), methimyesterday replied:
Oh vaya, qué gusto leer un comentario en español!! Muchas gracias por tus palabras, a mi inglés le queda mucho que pulir, pero es un incentivo para mejorarlo tener la meta de poder escribir fanfic!! ^^
Y sí, definitivamente sí, John y Sherlock juntos son puro amor... Tengo una debilidad por ellos que creo que es obvia jaja!!
Ahhhh, y esto me encantó: "Que sepas que para mí, desde ahora, este es su primer beso oficial". Qué halagador!!!!!
Mil gracias, de verdad <333333
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